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 Subject :Media Relations Manager seeking resume critique.. 2009-06-29 14:03:32 
MRManager
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Thank you to everyone who reviews and critiques my resume.

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 Subject :Re:Media Relations Manager seeking resume critique.. 2009-07-01 08:30:03 
estawina
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Your resume is pretty good, but you could do a better job with the PARs and SARs. You have a few very good ones, but have missed other opportunities. You may want to consider removing a few of the less essential duties that do not translate well as accomplishments. Here is one easy SAR improvement to include a metric:

Increased production productivity by 15% by streamlining procedures used to access media content from Cision UK and Cision Canada.

This sentence is a bit confusing and is also an oppportunity for a PAR: "Improved and generated monthly and quarterly spending and ROI reports with a focus on company-wide improvements to contribute to reduction of expenditures and improving efficiency." How about this?

Improved spending and ROI reports that contributed to a company-wide expenditure reduction of 20%.

A problem or situation should be added, such as "..., which reversed a trend of increasing expenditures. "Generated" doesn't add anything because if you can improve the report, it is safe to assume that you can run them. Actually, the ability to run reports is a given anyway. The metric may exceed the value of your contribution, but that doesn't invalidate the sentence.

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 Subject :Re:Media Relations Manager seeking resume critique.. 2009-07-01 07:33:11 
SaltTed
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The education section should be towards the end. Software proficiency should include the MS Office components such as Word, Excel etc for electronic scanners. Read the article on keywords and search optimization.Try to rewrite or reformat to eliminate the orphan words - the single word lines at ends of paragraphs.They make you seem design-principle unaware.
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 Subject :Re:Media Relations Manager seeking resume critique.. 2009-07-07 18:30:48 
MRManager
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Thank you both very much for the fantastic suggestions. I've posted my revision here again for any other suggestions.

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 Subject :Re:Media Relations Manager seeking resume critique.. 2009-07-10 13:28:16 
SaltTed
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You should substitute Summary with this headline: Media Relations and Project  Management Professional.

It still seems too dense and hard to wade through. More white space would help. How much of your tasks are just what would be normally expected out of the job vs notable accomplishments? The expected tasks shouldn’t be included because they detract from the notable ones, and the notable ones usually imply the other skills. For example, this rewritten PAR seems to include the territory covered by the tracking system for departmental order activity.

Reduced departmental spending by $360K annually, consistently coming in under budget, by modifying purchasing procedures to emphasize quality without compromising performance, creating a back up system for radio recordings and reducing payroll costs.

Both your first & second PARs do not need “monthly and quarterly” – it’s just extra verbiage with no value. You probably have more of those. Try this exercise – reduce the number of words in each point by 20% while retaining the meaning. 

The 2% metric is too small to be worth mentioning. It seems a little desperate, so I'd eliminate "by 2%".

This is an improved resume, but you can probably still do better. The new Personal Memory Support System creativity exercise would help tremendously and give a real boost to you networking activities at the same time.

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