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Welcome - How to use this board - Please Read   by  on 2009-05-20 08:33:21
 Subject :About to graduate with a little experience in Finance.. 2009-05-11 13:32:55 
OpenlyAnonymous
Joined: 2009-04-22 15:38:17
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I provided some help on this resume a while back. It was geared to a specific job listing and helped land the interview. Most importantly, he was hired.

The before version of the resume is attached.




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 Subject :Re:About to graduate with a little experience in Finance.. 2009-05-11 13:36:00 
OpenlyAnonymous
Joined: 2009-04-22 15:38:17
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Location: Wrong Coast

The after version is attached and my commentary follows:

  • Fixed margins
  • Made formatting consistent and more eye pleasing.
  • Changed order of accomplishments.
  • Moved employment history to before education
  • Changed employment history to reverse chronological order
  • Changed "summary" label to "Forex, Sales and Finance Professional" to show how the resume reflects the job requirements. This is what will keep them reading.
  • As we discussed, I added a metric and rewrote the first accomplishment.
  • Punched up the summary section.
    • Changed student to professional
    • Made the software sentence more generic.
    • Eliminated honest - many readers (including me) wonder why you'd think that was a question. It's a red flag. It may have made more sense for your current job because of access to cash.
    • Added the "motivate" phrase to further align the resume for a sales job.


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 Subject :Re:About to graduate with a little experience in Finance.. 2009-05-11 13:55:06 
OpenlyAnonymous
Joined: 2009-04-22 15:38:17
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Location: Wrong Coast
I also helped with the cover letter, which can be found here.
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